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dear preacher,
i've got something to admit
last sunday
i was in the field
i was watching the flowers get dressed
well they're just so pretty naked
petals tucked into their sides
and watching them unfold
i was watching them pull down the sunrise
and put it on themselves
so i'm a sinner for it
cause i watched them bathe, too
stand around together in the shower
a hundred ladies in their beautiful skins
pink small ones
big blue proud ones
letting the droplets collect and residue
on their finery and shamelessly bare leaves
well that's my confession preacher
i watch the flowers strip and tease
HOLY CRAP A DAILY DEVIATION NO WAY. I was so confused when i opened my inbox, I figured there was no way this could be mine :') Thank you so so much to saltwaterlungs for suggesting it holy CRAp I'm still freaking out THANK YOU GUYS I DON'T EVEN DESERVE THIS YOU ARE ALl SO NICE WOW THANK YOU AGAIN
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Given 2014-06-05
the flower club by Personghost puts an amusing and vivid twist on confessional poetry; as the suggester says, "I couldn't get the imagery out of my head". ( Suggested by saltwaterlungs and Featured by ShadowedAcolyte )
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vespera Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Congrats on the DD :)

Small edits:

cause i watched them bathe, too

(since you use a comma on the first line, I'm assuming you are using commas)

Also a bit puzzled why some of the "i's" are uppercase and some are lower case... may want to revisit that if you seek publication elsewhere with this piece :)
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Personghost Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2014  Student Writer
done!
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Vontage116 Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2014   General Artist
Awesome dude!
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Personghost Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2014  Student Writer
Thanks! Heart Heart Huggle! 
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Vontage116 Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2014   General Artist
No prob ^^
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Arcee01 Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2014
that so nice
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Personghost Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you Heart Huggle! 
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Arcee01 Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2014
welcome
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RoseScarlet Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2014  Student Writer
Congrats! <3 this is beautiful.
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Personghost Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you so much Heart 
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