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dear preacher,
i've got something to admit
last sunday
i was in the field
i was watching the flowers get dressed
well they're just so pretty naked
petals tucked into their sides
and watching them unfold
i was watching them pull down the sunrise
and put it on themselves
so i'm a sinner for it
cause i watched them bathe, too
stand around together in the shower
a hundred ladies in their beautiful skins
pink small ones
big blue proud ones
letting the droplets collect and residue
on their finery and shamelessly bare leaves
well that's my confession preacher
i watch the flowers strip and tease
HOLY CRAP A DAILY DEVIATION NO WAY. I was so confused when i opened my inbox, I figured there was no way this could be mine :') Thank you so so much to saltwaterlungs for suggesting it holy CRAp I'm still freaking out THANK YOU GUYS I DON'T EVEN DESERVE THIS YOU ARE ALl SO NICE WOW THANK YOU AGAIN
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Given 2014-06-05
the flower club by Personghost puts an amusing and vivid twist on confessional poetry; as the suggester says, "I couldn't get the imagery out of my head". ( Suggested by saltwaterlungs and Featured by ShadowedAcolyte )
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vespera Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Congrats on the DD :)

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cause i watched them bathe, too

(since you use a comma on the first line, I'm assuming you are using commas)

Also a bit puzzled why some of the "i's" are uppercase and some are lower case... may want to revisit that if you seek publication elsewhere with this piece :)
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Personghost Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2014  Student Writer
done!
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Vontage116 Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2014   General Artist
Awesome dude!
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Personghost Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2014  Student Writer
Thanks! Heart Heart Huggle! 
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Vontage116 Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2014   General Artist
No prob ^^
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Arcee01 Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2014
that so nice
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Personghost Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you Heart Huggle! 
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Arcee01 Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2014
welcome
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RoseScarlet Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2014  Student Writer
Congrats! <3 this is beautiful.
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Personghost Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you so much Heart 
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RoseScarlet Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2014  Student Writer
You are so welcome.
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SeptemberSkies2298 Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Lighthearted and vivid! This is just lovely, a well deserved DD
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Personghost Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you it means so muchHeart 
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carmencaracol Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
well, I think the preacher would approve!

"And why are you worried about clothing? Observe how the lilies of the field grow; they do not toil nor do they spin, yet I say to you that not even Solomon in all his glory clothed himself like one of these.…" Matthew 6:28-29


...straight from the mouth of the Lord ;)

nice poem!
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Personghost Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2014  Student Writer
 Very enlightening inpute I must say;)
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carmencaracol Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
ah, I'd be curious to know if you knew that particular passage...before you wrote your poem
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Personghost Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2014  Student Writer
I have heard of it! I wouldn't consider myself scholarly enough to claim to have remembered it as I wrote the poem hahaha but I've come across the passage (not surprising considering having grown up in a christian home)
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carmencaracol Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Ah! Well, then, maybe we can say... perhaps... a great Holy Spirit inspired your soul there a little bit subconsciously ;)
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Personghost Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2014  Student Writer
I like to consider every possibility ;)
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Personghost Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2014  Student Writer
input* oops ahaha
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Inemiset Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconthisplz:
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carmencaracol Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
haha, God is actually more liberal and romantic than He's sometimes represented by people :p
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Inemiset Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
True that.
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Kira-Jones Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2014
You defiantly deserve the DD I love this so much!!!
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Personghost Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2014  Student Writer
Wow thank you I'm really glad you liked it Love 
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Kira-Jones Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2014
Yeah it's just I dont know any good words but it's different 
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iDJPanda Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2014  Student General Artist
Congrats on the DD!:wink: by iDJPanda
Have a nice day! : )
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Personghost Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2014  Student Writer
thank you!
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iDJPanda Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Student General Artist
You're welcome! :happy lol awesome: 
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconlainloveplz::iconflyingheartsplz: :clap::clap::clap:
I’m very happy for you!!! :iconloveloveplz: :tighthug:
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Personghost Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you love!
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Interesting image! I think the pacing could use some work, but overall I very much enjoyed this. Congrats on the DD! :)
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Personghost Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you! I'm considering doing a revision so I'll keep that in mind!
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BonumNox Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2014  Student General Artist
Oh! I enjoyed this. It was short and sweet. It really put me in the seat of the watcher I could just see the boy/girl watching as all those women undressed, knowing that it was a sin but couldn't look away from the sights in front of him. I can see glistening pearls of water slide down petal soft skin this is very very beautiful. I started snapping when I finished and I have shared this on my social medias (though I don't have a lot of followers).
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Personghost Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2014  Student Writer
I feel so honored! Thank you so much I'm so glad you liked it that much truly!
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BonumNox Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2014  Student General Artist
Oh it was great! I'm thinking of printing this out and tapping it to my ceiling (where all my fave things go then fall off because of gravity.) your welcome. 
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Personghost Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2014  Student Writer
If you did that I would feel like the coolest person alive I swear
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BonumNox Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2014  Student General Artist
I went to print it and my printer wouldn't work. D:
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Personghost Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2014  Student Writer
Oh no:(
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BonumNox Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2014  Student General Artist
I did the next best thing I made it my wallpaper! Image by RajanahJewelShanklin  
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Personghost Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2014  Student Writer
Ah! That's so wonderful I feel so flattered Huggle!  Love Heart I think I've fainted. 
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JoryRFerrell Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2014  Professional Artist
Neat, neat....
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Personghost Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2014  Student Writer
:) thank you
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bloedzuigerbloed Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautifully written. It's a shame more people didn't comment on this piece.
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Personghost Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2014  Student Writer
Hahaha thank you lovely it means a lot. I'm not concerned with the views I'm just amazed it got submitted!
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TheWilyWildcat Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2014  Student General Artist
Lovely imagery and great use of soft humour too, made the whole thing really pleasing to read whilst still fitting in with the imagery, made me smile...very well deserved DD!  Clap 
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Personghost Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2014  Student Writer
Ahh wow thank you!
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TheWilyWildcat Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014  Student General Artist
You're very welcome! :D
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IyraEMM Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
love this! has a great tone. congrats :) 
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Personghost Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you it means so much <3
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